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absence makes the heart a monster.
a six word story poem.
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:icontinaaw:
tinaaw Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Stunning work - congrats.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013   Writer
thanks very much.
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:icontinaaw:
tinaaw Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
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sherbetblooms Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
omg :heart: perfect!
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013   Writer
thank you, Natalie!
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Nysa-Nightsong Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Student Writer
I don't know if this is a compliment to your writing or personality, but there's something in your stuff that rouses the inner contrarian. :O_o:

This actually rings true (in some cases) and is fairly consistent with experience, i just feel like arguing with the concept for whatever insane reason. :shakefist: :facepalm:

Sorry if that's dubious feedback, to put it in a positive light maybe you could take from it that your writing evokes reactions in even so concentrated a form?
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013   Writer
Oh, that feedback works for me. Thank you.
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:iconxtrqs:
XTRQS Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013
I think this is just right. In my opinion there's NOTHING better than concentrated poetry that comes in short, fantastic bursts. Well done.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013   Writer
Thank ya much.
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scatteredwords Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:clap:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013   Writer
thank you!
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:iconnicholsjoseph22:
nicholsjoseph22 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013
Short and sweet.  Nice
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013   Writer
thank you.
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flummo Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013  Student Writer
Ahh this is great. :heart:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013   Writer
thanks very much.
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the-beastie Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Although this poem isn't a free-flowing waterfall that cascades from the heart in a rush of tumultuous water (as ALL poetry should be, right?), I super dig it anyway! Gave me a smile :D
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013   Writer
haha. much obliged. thanks!
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Flynt126 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013
Considering how my relative insanity is peaking at this point, i can't help but to agree.

Also this has got to be one of the better-bestest six word things i've seen
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013   Writer
very much appreciated. thank you.
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JadedStrayHyena Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The absence of what though? I have my ideas...
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013   Writer
Good to hear. I always like when people put their own spin on things I scribble.
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thepulpofyourheart Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013
this is way too true and it stings  ( :thumbsup: )
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013   Writer
Thank ya much.
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013
Your fantastic work has been featured in Friday Night Features.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013   Writer
Thanks, Steven!
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Tarzok Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013
:clap::clap::clap:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013   Writer
Thank you!
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snowywolf13 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I really like this. It's unique
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013   Writer
Much obliged.
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snowywolf13 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Also, it makes me wonder....I wonder what the speaker is separated from, and I want to know more. Great job!
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Blood-Night-Goddess Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Dear Whoever-You-May-Be-That-Wrote-The-Submission-Above,
     I know you meant to say something profound with this sentence that you've submitted, but I'm finding simple generics on this particular page. I do not see a poem (or poetry in any way, shape, or form) on this page. I see a grammatically incorrect metaphor. A poem is more than a sentence in length and has more imagery than a simple Frankenstein heart that goes berserk from being alone or away from something significant. A poem is a free-flowing waterfall. It cascades from the heart in a rush of tumultuous water that many don't dare attempt to cross. Many cannot fathom what drives this rush of cool emotion. Many will struggle to figure out where the waterfall began, and were it ends. A single sentence neither makes people struggle to understand the meaning of the emotions, nor does a sentence convey the full range of emotion that a full poem (even a haiku) is able to achieve.  
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wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
aww. you are cute. truly. i mean that with no disrespect :) gotta stretch the limits. what's a freefall of gushing emotions to one is an overflow of syrupy coated flowers to other. the beauty of poetry is that it can stretch all rules an convention. i guess micropoetry is not your fav genre ;) that said pissing on others work because of your own beliefs is not super nice.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013   Writer
I probably could've stopped reading after "I know you meant
to say something profound" because WRONG! What I did was
make a play on the old expression, "absence makes the heart
grow fonder," and have fun with it. What I did was use the six
word story idea established by some hack called Ernest Hemingway.
Someone probably should have told him that six words don't make a story.
What I did was express an idea in six words; it's called brevity -
your rambling attempt at poetic enlightenment could've used some.
I'm sorry your parents didn't hug you enough, or you're mad that this
ended up on the front page, or whatever your deal is. If you'd like to
read a poem with more words, my gallery is full of them. This however
IS A SIX WORD POEM. Congratulations on completely missing the point!

Now, get back on out there and keep saving the world from
all us terrible writers.
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wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:#1:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013   Writer
:highfive:
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Aphose Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh? A poem can't be short?
www.youtube.com/watch?v=6F7quI…
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Blood-Night-Goddess Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Poems can be short. In my opinion, this submission is not a poem. It is a metaphor. A generic metaphor.
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jillian834 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
chill~
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:iconblood-night-goddess:
Blood-Night-Goddess Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I am quite chill. I am so chill that I might as well be a bowl of ice cubes. I just don't believe that this particular submission is poetry. It has the potential to be a full blown, deep, meaningful poem if the writer puts more into it. But alas, it is simply a sentence, and I must admit that it frustrates me to see it classified as a poem. Like I said, it can be more, and I'm sure the writer can come up with some other wonderful analogies to fully explain and deepen what they were trying to convey.
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jillian834 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Poems don't have to be long to be deep. 
For all we know this poem could reach out to someone in dire need and save them from suicide. All poem are beautiful, be patient and open minded.
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MehreenFreed Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The title immediately transports me to one of my favorite BBC Podcasts by Jarvis Cocker.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013   Writer
Very nice! I'm a big Pulp fan, but I don't really keep up with
podcasts. It's nice to be mentioned in the same sentence
with Jarvis, though.
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Is-lnds Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013
really do like this
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013   Writer
Thank you!
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:iconis-lnds:
Is-lnds Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013
always!
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TwistedAlyx Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ha, it sure does. 
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013   Writer
Indeed!
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Refallath Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013
Oh, um, hi!

I like this and I like you, so a favorite seems appropriate. 
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013   Writer
:heart:
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