I like it very much, some of the figurative language is really good and it really provokes my brain! Well done!

Yes! Another fantasticly twisted poem. Ooh! You really went all out this time with your ticks with words. I really enjoyed it though. I'm glad that you got to write during this time of abscence. Wow, there's so much I want to say, but the words are just loose off my tongue. . . Usually I would seem to find one or two of the little chunks (I don't know if you can really call them stanzas here) as my favorites, but in these, I love aspects of them all. Fantastic job once again. I do hope that you find the time to find your pen (or fingers to the keyboard. ^_^) scratching on paper again some time soon.

Ciao. ^_~

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You need only believe. .

I really liked the last section. (especially "dear empty echoes of my own unspoken words / sorry we've been secretly not speaking lately")

But the entire poem conveys a lot more than simple description of a trip. ^^ Absolutely amazing, once again.

This piece evokes so many emotions for lonliness...to sadness...to absolute awe at how amazing your writing is! Beautiful piece...love it all over !

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May God help me if I ever have to use my art...

I think there's something quite profound about the first stanza. I also sometimes sit and wonder if someone has been sitting and writing parts for me that I wish I had a part in choosing. I think the idea is such an interesting one, and I think the personification in the first few lines really helps this idea along.

"river rapids literally ripping through the wall" --> I don't quite understand this line. When I read this stanza, it reads very fast, like a rush of thoughts. I'm unsure if I like the idea of such speed, but I do like the idea of the rushing thoughts. I think it's the enjambment making it read very fast. There's hardly any pauses. It's like those word association type thoughts. I guess it's allowed to be fleeting and fast then. Hrm. And perhaps it is a good idea. I suppose what I don't like about this stanza is that its abstract, and its quite disjointed but I reckon that works if your point was for it to be what I mentioned above.

Bleh. I really don't like the third stanza. I don't understand it. I'm unsure if maybe it's because I'm not American.

3rd stanza: I like the second line Slice of reality. The last line makes me ponder what on earth was going through your head.

4th stanza: First line seems a bit dramatic. But its like a monologue, so I don't think its all that bad. third line is pretty. Okay, bugger that, I like everything from third line down

This deviation, among many others of yours has been sitting in my message thingie forever. Sorry about that. I really enjoyed this poem - I like how the poem moves like a journey - from thought to thought, place to place and emotion to different emotion. I guess it is quite epic heh. It was a good read and since I have never been overseas, let alone left my own country, I liked how you included where you were when you wrote each poem. Almost makes me think that each place evokes a fundamentally different emotion and state of mind. Anyway, it was a good read

No great words of praise or interpretation here. Words are your game, not mine. Have some penguins.

Replace "game" with "art".

Really great. This is one of my favourites. Cheers to the next great poet.

Wow, I'm glad I happened across this here thing, one question, did you actually go on this trip or is it all art?

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"You're not fuckin' Santa Clause, Julian, and I don't need your fuckin' cherry trees."

Fuck you Kipprusoff, ya chain-smokin ginger!

This was all written on a real trip.

xo!