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if ever a bit discouraged
remember
we're all made with worlds inside
and collision
though often unavoidable
need not be unenjoyable

it's a matter-of-fact fiction:
heads
wrapped up in
hearts
wrapped up in
arms
outstretched and
waiting

so
how long can you
really
stay a stranger
when it all adds up
to two too tired of alone
and everything entailed
with haunting themes recurring
and pauses
where our shouts should be
and somehow
somewhere
the saints are
still
marching on
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Daily Deviation

Given 2006-04-05
When you think about it, q: how? a: romantic. by ~YouInventedMe doesn't just make sense, it makes you smile. ( Suggested by secondmagpie and Featured by imperfect )
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This is still one of my favorite poems. Ever. :)
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2011   Writer
thanks! and you're still one of my favorite deviants. ever. :)
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:iconliliwrites:
LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:blush:
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katarthis Featured By Owner May 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
What was said for the Daily Deviation blurb is exactly how I feel.

when it all adds up to two too tired of alone

How could anyone have said it better?

k
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner May 30, 2011   Writer
thank ya much
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:iconilyilaice:
ilyilaice Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2011
Amazing.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2011   Writer
:blush: thanks.
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:iconmeghan-solo:
meghan-solo Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2011
well hey now yes exactly.
i wrote about strange-r love just recently.
this fits in there somehow quite nicely.
old meeting new! how wonderful :)

:heart: faved
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2011   Writer
much obliged.
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:iconveraciousgentleman:
VeraciousGentleman Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2011
Very clever and insightful, it made me smile..
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2011   Writer
thanks a lot.
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:iconneonxaos:
neonxaos Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
"we're all made with worlds inside"

YES!
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2010   Writer
:highfive: thank you, my friend!
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:iconcynical-chan:
cynical-chan Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
The second stanza is really fantastic.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2009   Writer
:) thanks very much
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:iconkneelingglory:
KneelingGlory Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
I commented on this before, but I just thought you should know it is one of my favorite poems ever :) And late congrats on the DD ;)
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009   Writer
:kiss: thanks so much
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:icongaioumonbatou:
GaioumonBatou Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2009
D'you know, I read this before and never commented on it. Shame on me.

to two too tired of alone

I love the alliteration, excellent words to have it on as well. Brilliant!
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2009   Writer
thanks very much


xo!
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:iconmegumi-chi-zaib:
megumi-chi-zaib Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2008
wow. i have no words
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2008   Writer
:heart:


xo!
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:iconmegumi-chi-zaib:
megumi-chi-zaib Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2008
x]
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maalaki-cecile Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2008  Professional Photographer
what i like about your poetry ,in general and in here also surely is taht we can see it as haikus even if not ...or you know , in a schedule like :
sentence a
sentence b
sentence c
sentence d
we can mix them how we feel
a with c
b with d ... or whatever we feel

i like that :)
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2008   Writer
dizzying and marvelous of you to say


xo!
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MichaelcNorth Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2008
Again, a masterpiece.. Amazing job
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2008   Writer
thanks very much


xo!
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:iconrain-fairie:
Rain-Fairie Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2008  Student Traditional Artist
WOW you managed to fit all three meanings of the word "to" in one line.

To two too

:O

:heart:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2008   Writer
:D


xo!
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TerrorCookie Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2008
When I started reading this, I immediately thought it would make a good song too. :)

I like how unique and inventive each stanza is. They're all quite different, but they come together so nicely.

it's a matter-of-fact fiction

Nice oxymoron there! :aww:

The very last stanza made me think of how a lot of people seem to hold back. It reminds me of one of my English teachers when he used to say, "Seize the day!"

I very much enjoyed this. :heart:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2008   Writer
:D much obliged

xo!
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KneelingGlory Featured By Owner May 29, 2008
Wow. I had to read that through three times before I felt brave enough to say anything about it. I especially loved the triple use of the "to, two, too" and "and collision/though often unavoidable/need not be unenjoyable" made me smile. So very true. This is a fantastic piece of writing. Thanks so much for sharing.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner May 29, 2008   Writer
:D much obliged

xo!
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:icondruidzwolf:
druidzwolf Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
Wow I love this!

... What do the last 4 lines mean? I really want to know...
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner May 28, 2008   Writer
thanks

I suppose that's up to you

xo!
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:iconchildhoodlover:
ChildHoodLover Featured By Owner May 1, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
simply awsome : )
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner May 2, 2008   Writer
thank ya much

xo!
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colacandy Featured By Owner May 1, 2008
i want to be in that number...........
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner May 2, 2008   Writer
me too

xo!
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colacandy Featured By Owner May 2, 2008
:)
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larissaroo Featured By Owner May 1, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Kwiii, I loves it! It's neatness. -^_*-
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner May 2, 2008   Writer
thanks a lot

xo!
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agirlcalledjaz Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2008
i love this, x
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2008   Writer
thank you very much


xo!
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OliviaSFA Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2008   Writer
Ai! Bellissimo! Bravo!

It's our whole being.

In words.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2008   Writer
thanks very much


xo!
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:iconelid:
elid Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2008
This:

"it's a matter-of-fact fiction:
heads
wrapped up in
hearts
wrapped up in
arms
outstretched and
waiting"

creates the most perfect vision in my head. And it is now repeating in my head. One read through, and I already have it memorize. I feel like one of these days, I'll be drawing something, and in the back of my head, those words will sit, shifty and flirtatious.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2008   Writer
thanks a lot


xo!
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:iconkitit21:
kitit21 Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2008  Student Artisan Crafter
So many 2s
made my heart smile
and my mouth dance
WITH JOY
awesome
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