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lies like love
like mystery

it was (your jigsaw face)
falling
to
pieces

that helped me (put it together)
with a question mark
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sanaa-h Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh the imagery <3
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner May 27, 2013   Writer
<3
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neonxaos Featured By Owner May 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Is the question mark a late addition?
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner May 17, 2013   Writer
no, sir.
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:iconclair:
Clair Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013
Evidence of how we need each other- of how we really are connected. Separate but part of the same progression. This is lovely- thank you for sharing!
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2013   Writer
Much obliged.
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o0Amphigory0o Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
I faved this a while ago but after reading it again I just want to comment. This is such an intriguing piece, I love how, at first glance, it seems simple, but upon further inspection you notice all of the double meanings, way things connect (the parenthesis make their own 'poem', without the parenthesis make another 'poem', etc), it's fascinating. Love the thought and emotion in this, great!
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013   Writer
thank you, my dear. very much appreciated.
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dygariad Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
"your jigsaw face"...
i love that line so much.
Beautiful as always! :')
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013   Writer
thanks very much
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:iconpseudometry:
pseudometry Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013   Writer
Great piece. Lies like love do indeed like mystery, don't they (don't they?). There's that question mark...
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013   Writer
:iconquestionmarkplz:
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:iconpseudometry:
pseudometry Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013   Writer
:evenbiggerquestionmarkplz:

Well played, sir. Well played.
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:iconsherbetblooms:
sherbetblooms Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
damn :heart: dig this, Shane!
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013   Writer
thanks a lot!
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:icongreatgidding:
GreatGidding Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Really, cool man, really cool.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013   Writer
thanks. glad to heard from you!
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:iconis-lnds:
Is-lnds Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013
:clap:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013   Writer
:bow:
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astrangeallure Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Love this!!! :heart:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013   Writer
thank ya much
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astrangeallure Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome. :)
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Professional Writer
parfait.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013   Writer
:highfive:
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:iconrlkirkland:
rlkirkland Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013   Writer
:D
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VertigoArt Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Professional Writer
other than desperately wanting a comma after "lies", I love the piece. :D

I like the piece within the piece almost better though. the only way to put something together (like life) is by falling to pieces first.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013   Writer
thanks, Will.
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LeonieSainteVire Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013
Such symmetry! I love the "cadence."
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013   Writer
thankyouthankyou
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arliddian Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2008
I like it a lot. The brackets are used well. :)
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2008   Writer
thank you

xo!
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:iconex-favilla:
ex-favilla Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2008
few words, much empathy.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2008   Writer
thank ya kindly

xo!
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:iconavivah:
avivah Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2008   Writer
you say soo much in so few words it's astounding !
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2008   Writer
thank you very much

xo!
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hunnybunny09 Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2008
Short, sweet.
For the amount of words you used,
it's very excellent at getting the point across.
Beautifully written.
Awesome angle.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2008   Writer
:) thank you

xo!
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playacardzright Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2008
brilliant.. and quite mysterious.. i like this alot!!
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2008   Writer
much obliged

xo!
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:iconlnin9:
LNIN9 Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2008
you do wonderful work my friend!!!!!
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2008   Writer
:) thank ya kindly

xo!
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:iconkiwibri:
KiwiBri Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2008
This is really gorgeous.
I know I always say gorgeous, but really I find it to be the best word.

Its so vivid. Its really like a painting. Thats why I love your writing so much :*
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2008   Writer
well, your comments are pretty swell too.
;)

thanks

xo!
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OLoboCanta Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2008
hot shit. i love this. sounds like the end of a long story.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2008   Writer
haha
yeah, something like that
something like that, indeed

thanks

xo!
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:iconolobocanta:
OLoboCanta Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2008
:P
i hear ya
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:iconkurenaixseito:
kurenaiXseito Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2008
Do you, perchance, like Radiohead?
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2008   Writer
I've "liked" radiohead
since pablo honey
which means
for just about forever

but I've never been as obsessed or
ga ga over them as some of my friends


why do you ask?

xo!
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kurenaiXseito Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2008
This poem reminded me of "Jigsaw Falling Into Place." [:
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