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the smoke beneath your bed finally finds you
staring crooked in broken mirrors
searching frantically
for the fire of your former features

forever and ember
still breath and false starts

'til it whispers

sure
the universe is big business
constantly expanding
but the fact of (the) matter is
it desires you deposit d.n.a.

demanding genetic building blocks
on which to lay its foundation

and though the future of father's daughters
is
certainly uncertain
the sun set's assured
eventual
consumption
of
everything

meanwhile

I'm eagerly anticipating the arrival
of the non-linear one-liner

something like:

yes it all implodes in infinity
but buildings retain their names anyway

or

mountains and their silhouettes sit still
yet oppose portraits on general principal

opinions vary

the stars think they're brilliant

the general population favors vague impressions
and

most allow the words
(to escape unnoticed)
full title: now accepting applications for life's purpose
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:iconmissunderstand:
MissUnderstand Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012
Hi.
I think your first stanza is about me.
How did you know?
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012   Writer
MAGIC!
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:iconinsober:
insober Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2011  Student General Artist
MASHED POTATOES
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2011   Writer
yes, but can you do THE TWIST?
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insober Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2012  Student General Artist
admittedly, i cannot. i can walk with a full glass of beer and not spill it though. but since i've quit drinking it hasn't done me much good
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Penessence Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2011
great expression of decay
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2011   Writer
thanks. nice to hear from you again.
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Penessence Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2011
:]
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:iconpiscesandthediamonds:
Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
i love this one so much :heart: ur a master of endings, dear Shane!
"I'm eagerly anticipating the arrival
of the non-linear one-liner

something like:

yes it all implodes in infinity
but buildings retain their names anyway"

*melts*

"most allow the words
(to escape unnoticed)" - yet i know you don't :)

Well done!
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2011   Writer
:blowkiss:
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:iconlicoricefactory:
licoricefactory Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2011
love it!
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2011   Writer
thanks!
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:iconlnin9:
LNIN9 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2011
just so you know when you publish i shall buy....:)
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2011   Writer
thank you, my friend
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:iconavfc4me:
avfc4me Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2011
Does this mean you're pregnant?
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2011   Writer
only with emotion
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:iconavfc4me:
avfc4me Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011
Huh. Isn't that where the trouble usually starts?
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throughangelseyes7 Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2011
well, i was waiting to read this until i could devote my full attention to it, and i am very glad i did. in fact, i read it twice.

i.loved.every.line.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2011   Writer
thank ya much
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:iconalisonblue:
AlisonBlue Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2011  Student Writer
more non-linear one-liners, please ;)
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2011   Writer
working on working on it
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:iconalisonblue:
AlisonBlue Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2011  Student Writer
waiting patiently
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:iconarchelyxs:
archelyxs Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2011
"sure
the universe is big business
constantly expanding"
This is where the poem came alive for me, all words after were breathless wonders
Beautiful work :heart:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2011   Writer
many thanks
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:icondoukeshi-55:
Doukeshi-55 Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Brilliant Work As Always. Love The Title.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2011   Writer
much obliged.
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:icondoukeshi-55:
Doukeshi-55 Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Think Nothing Of It Dude.
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:iconneneplayswithpaper:
Neneplayswithpaper Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011
I have missed your brilliance! :heart::heart:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2011   Writer
:heart:!
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011
Your fantastic work has been featured in Friday Night Features
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2011   Writer
thank you very much!
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Mortuelle Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011
aah Mr Shane, you're quite something, aren't you? :heart:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2011   Writer
:heart:
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2011
Imbued with a certain "smoke" from beginning to end.

I thought this was excellent, particularly the launch.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2011   Writer
thank you, sir.
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Nimhsay Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2011  Student
it's really uncanny how addicting your verses are....o.O :+favlove:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2011   Writer
thanks so much
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:iconrlkirkland:
rlkirkland Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Purpose and Meaning
...yes, ever lurking in the minds of thoughtful people.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2011   Writer
thank you
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Jinx-DB Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
It's like a contemporary retelling of (thousands of) Shakespeare sonnets, but in a beautifully subtle way. This interests me because, in general, it's not a topic we like to discuss anymore - we all like to think we'll live forever, that it's never too late for our DNA (and of course, thanks to scientific advances, this is somewhat true). The flow is very good; I was really drawn through the phrases towards the end. Wonderful work! :)
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2011   Writer
thank ya much
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Jinx-DB Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :)
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DavisMarie Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
:thumbsup:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2011   Writer
:highfive:
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Quemaqua Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2011  Professional Writer
This is some good stuff. It moves like crazy, rolls like a lightning strike (can those roll?) from beginning to end, stabs at the idea until it hits a nerve. Great!
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2011   Writer
thank ya kindly
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rober2 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2011  Professional Writer
yes it all implodes in infinity
but buildings retain their names anyway

That made made my day.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2011   Writer
many thanks
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KneelingGlory Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
the sun set's assured
eventual consumption of everything


How comforting. :P
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