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does it rain where you are?

here
the sky has teeth

the ground
a jaw
beneath

dreams are thieves they
steal my sleep

and awake
they steal my breath

life is
what is
left

between every
little death
"Across the desert lies the promised land."
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Postmorteum Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2016
Incredible piece!
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ignition191 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
beautiful!
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2016   Writer
And thanks again.
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ignition191 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
yw
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sanaa-h Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
Every few years, I randomly check DA, read your poems and remember just how fantastic your words are!
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2016   Writer
Very kind of you to say. I was mostly away these past couple of years myself.
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2016
An economical piece of writing, fixing a state of mind in vivid language, As good as expected, Shane
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2016   Writer
Thanks very much, Alec.
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2016
My pleasure!
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similar-singularity Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2016
this :heart:
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2016   Writer
Thank you.
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Lunulae Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2016  Student Writer
I loved the first few lines. I have a special affinity for teeth, it seems. :heart:
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2016   Writer
Much obliged. Here is an old teeth thing. Sort of. Maybe. youinventedme.deviantart.com/a…
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YoungvanWinkle Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
With so lttle wors...nice
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2016   Writer
Thanks!
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KiwiBri Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2016
Loved it. The end is my favorite but the flow is completely on point - makes it hard to decide where the beginning really ends and the end really begins :) 
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2016   Writer
Thank you!
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rhunel Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2016   General Artist
Skull Jawdrop 
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2016   Writer
!!!
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Hades-Flower Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2016
A couple of my fave lines from "Willy Wonka and the Chocolate Factory" (the title and description). R.I.P. Gene Wilder.
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2016   Writer
It seemed appropriate today.
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