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if it's too broke
don't fix it
pick apart the problems
put the pieces on exhibit
see, my pen breathes & bleeds
because my heart beats too afraid
mistakes made into art
in an attempt to trick my trade
a steady fade away from focus
on the flaws that frame this feeling
fact lacks the impact that makes
fiction so appealing
and an admission's less revealing
(w)rapped in a rhymer's guise
private parts don't rank so major
when they've been generalized


All diameters specified,
and written compositions
from those passed who testified
Limbs encased, and set aside
Windows to the hell inside,
The clash of when my pen collides
Among bass lines of hearts beating
Diseased seedlings dreaming
Screaming poems from tree leaf
doused in pen ink that compose
a foes defeating.
Clear and vivid harmful images,
enthroned in tablets depicted
in words fallen slowly
from my sickened grips
deadly when in melody
Unless steadily,
released in increments
©2008-2010 `YouInventedMe
:iconyouinventedme:

Author's Comments

happily presenting this hip hop poetry collab with the fantastic
:iconoldest-boy:

I hadn't dropped a hip hop verse in a while
so I wrote the first verse and
and he obliged me by writing the second

look for another collaboration between the two of us
with a decidedly different flavor
coming soon to watchlist near you

(please) check out his gallery!


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interested in collaborating?
writer, photographer, painter, whatever(er) -
I'll mix with words with anything you've got.

Comments


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:iconoldest-boy:
It was a pleasure working with you,
I Look forward to our next project, good sir.

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'SHARKS DON'T SLEEP' a collection of poems by Eric Hamilton.
:icontangled-up-in-blue:
You are quite the busy bee.

I would cry to myself a little if I wrote with so many people.

It's such a good writing exercise though.

Mmhm.

Someday I am going to send you a picture of my cat since he is my only friend and I will say, "Write a poem about this picture."

This will be your poem:

You are
a loser
why are
you still
writing

Shouldn't you
be feeding
your best
and only
friend:

your cat
Marcel



I am done. Continue all business as usual, sir.
:iconholdingbacktears:
i quite liked this piece. kudos to the both of you. :)

--
--Emo happens--

have you ever wanted to die, but still be here???
:iconyouinventedme:
and I will reply to your letter-wrapped photo
with a picture of me writing
the word touche


but with appropriate punctuation
and lots of hearts and smileys



xo!

--
one half of *ZombiesAteUs
:iconyouinventedme:
right back atcha



xo!

--
one half of *ZombiesAteUs
:iconyouinventedme:
thank ya much


xo!

--
one half of *ZombiesAteUs
:iconscarlettstone000:
Oh man...
i seriously love this.
you two blow my mind...

oh man, oh man.
i got so into it! lol

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* Shut up and read..
:iconyouinventedme:
:D glad to hear it


thanks


xo!

--
one half of *ZombiesAteUs
:iconholdingbacktears:
quite welcome
:)

--
--Emo happens--

have you ever wanted to die, but still be here???
:iconr-mitchell:
good job, guys. fantastic wordplay and strong imagery... it's got a nice flow to it too.

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