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watching madmen (and)
eating fresh kills
in the dark

picking the carcass apart

my hands
halves of a euphemism

the raw start of symbolism

hearts unharmed
are poems
unwritten
fresh as the fallen
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poetzzz Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2016
"The world breaks everyone, and afterward, some are strong at the broken places." - Ernest Hemingway.

I like to think poetry is a language peculiar to that psychic geography. It's probably just the poet in me, but it may stand as a warning. Try not to get too hurt. You have only to be human to be loved and needed.
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2016   Writer
Thank you, for this and the other time you've spent with my scribbles.
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frecklehammer Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
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Themis-Kali Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014
my hands
halves of a euphemism

very interesting visual.  Overall the flow of this poem really holds one and encourages rereading for the different thoughts it brings.
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014   Writer
Thank you!
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UnspecifiedUnknown Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2013   Writer
like the soft fall and rise of a crescendo, that's what this poem reminded me of :heart: 
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013   Writer
Thanks very much.
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2013
The bare skeleton of a poem! Excellent indeed :nod:
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2013   Writer
Thank you, Alec.
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013
:D
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Student Writer
Whoa! I think I've fainted. This is just amazing!
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013   Writer
Thank ya much!
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akkajess Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:wave: Hello!

You've been featured here:

Have a wonderful day! :heart:
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013   Writer
Thanks a lot!
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Marssamuel Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I started staring at my hands, folding them together, pulling them apart, folding them together, pulling them apart...
This went on for a while, but I think I started understanding. 
I love these kind of poems that I have to sit there and consider it for a while. Where the writer uses imagery instead of just relying on the emotion behind the words. I love the emotion in this poem by the way. 
As a whole it forces me to imagine, and lets me take away my own meaning, making it mean something to me while reamaining your own personal expression.
Cheers for this one!
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013   Writer
Oh, this is a delightful comment. Thank you very much.
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Marssamuel Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome, I really enjoyed it!
-Cheers!
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Is-lnds Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013
hearts unharmed
are poems
unwritten



^ wow. truth.
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013   Writer
Thank you.
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greenpencilbag Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
When I read the title I was thinking of Doctor Who but I don't think you were trying to do that but good poem anyways.
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013   Writer
I am a big Who fan, but I definitely was not thinking of that
reference when I titled the piece. Still, it's a happy accident,
and I'm glad you mentioned it.  I'm also glad you enjoyed
the poem.

Thank you.
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XTRQS Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013
Fantastic.
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013   Writer
Thank you.
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KiwiBri Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013
So much beautiful I just.
I'm blown away.

Thank you for this sir <3
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013   Writer
Thanks very much.
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That last stanza is fantastic.
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013   Writer
Thanks a lot.
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throughangelseyes7 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013
Killed it. I love the last three lines :heart: 

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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013   Writer
Much obliged.
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AsakoBunny Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful. ^-^
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013   Writer
Thank you very much.
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