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birthday poem by *YouInventedMe:iconYouInventedMe:

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something's swallowed up
the breadcrumbs
we were left

so
we
take

each day as it comes
and let it
lead us
to the next

pausing only an-
nually

to celebrate
our breath to
let life

laugh in the face
of death
to

measure moments
by their depth
and
by

the company
they keep

instead of
dressing
dogs as gods
who keep us fearful
while they sleep
we should
rest

and be
thankful for the path
however we've misstepped
©2009 *YouInventedMe
:iconyouinventedme:

Author's Comments

"the kind of mistakes
that take your breath away"


---
~KiwiBri requested a birthday poem,
and the rest is history. actually, that part
is history, too.

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:iconosiristhrasher06:
=Osiristhrasher06 Jun 22, 2009, 10:45:32 AM
dogs as god

lovely, subtle palindrome.

we should
rest

and be
thankful for the path

wisdom.

--
If you like it, suggest it for a Daily Deviation! :D
dA is for the literary arts, too.
:iconaadea:
~Aadea Jun 22, 2009, 10:48:07 AM
:3 Optimistic little spin for the birthday day.


I feel like this should be snuggled and cooed into a baby's neck, or like screamed epicly at the top of a skyscraper, hamlet style.


:heart:!
:iconsuperlauren:
~superlauren Jun 22, 2009, 10:48:56 AM
This is very sweet. Love the first 3 stanzas!

I have a friend who doesn't celebrate his birthdays because, according to him, he didn't "do anything" to earn them. But I think the
"to celebrate
our breath to
let life

laugh in the face
of death"
part sums up the idea of birthdays perfectly :]

p.s.: nice drawing of a present ;]

--
May your organs fail before your dreams fail you.
:iconbekkia:
=bekkia Jun 22, 2009, 10:49:40 AM
I'm a real sucker for palindromes. ;)
:iconyouinventedme:
*YouInventedMe Jun 22, 2009, 10:53:22 AM
thank you, sir. I considered
putting parentheses around the
s on gods, but decided it would
be noticeable enough.


much appreciated.

--
an antique arms and armor expert
:iconyouinventedme:
*YouInventedMe Jun 22, 2009, 10:53:51 AM
I AM THE BEST DRAWERERER OF PRESENTS EVER!!!! ;)


and thank you

--
an antique arms and armor expert
:iconyouinventedme:
*YouInventedMe Jun 22, 2009, 10:55:01 AM
I will snuggle with your skyscraper,
and scream it on the top of a baby.

:kiss::kiss::kiss:

--
an antique arms and armor expert
:iconosiristhrasher06:
=Osiristhrasher06 Jun 22, 2009, 10:55:40 AM
you're very welcome, Shane.
yeh, it was fairly obvious, but it was hidden enough as to question "I wonder if he did that intentionally or if it was just a awesome coincidence."

I assumed the former because you are a skilled poet. :)

--
If you like it, suggest it for a Daily Deviation! :D
dA is for the literary arts, too.
:iconrebelegade:
~Rebelegade Jun 22, 2009, 10:56:10 AM
beeaaauuuttiifffuuull.
:)

--
Love like you've never been hurt... :heart:
:iconyouinventedme:
*YouInventedMe Jun 22, 2009, 10:56:14 AM
:) thanks. I considered parentheses here
dogs as god(s), but decided against it. I
hoped it would be caught anyway. you sharp
tacks haven't let me down.

--
an antique arms and armor expert
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