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send me your seeds
in the same tube
we
discussed

wave and recede
'til they breathe
the dust
of us

it's just
there's much
I'd like to touch
hearts
hands
and such

and oh!
the time
that I
would spend

laying my roots
sans stems
and shoots
a truth

where animals
are animate
and trees
are not born
men

I can't defend
much less
depend upon
a sky lit
by
moonshine
pink within

but though  
I dream
of other worlds
than these
I
can not
change my skin
I'm happy to present this collaboration with the
deviously deviant & wonderfully whimsical
:icono0amphigory0o:

she drew the fantastic image above and wrote in the
artist's comments "some little creature who's depressed
about being connected to a tree"

she asked me to write something to accompany it
and I more than happily obliged

you can check out the original image here: [link]

you can view our other collabs here: [link]

(please) check out her gallery!


ps. if you like this collab, try this one: [link]
----
interested in collaborating?
writer, photographer, painter, whatever(er) -
I'll mix with words with anything you've got.
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:iconastrikos:
Astrikos Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012   General Artist
I love the image. :la:

Definitely love the literature as well..

the form is really good, and that structure is solid as well. I love the imagery and flow. :heart:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012   Writer
many thanks!
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:iconastrikos:
Astrikos Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012   General Artist
:heart:
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:iconchilindra:
chilindra Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2012
Vert cute and creative collaborations! They are so whymsical!!
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2012   Writer
thanks very much. do you mind if I ask you how you came across
this deviation? I've suddenly had an influx of people viewing it
today.

thanks again,
shane!
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:iconchilindra:
chilindra Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2012
It's actually one of todays daily deviations!!!! It's really amazing!!!! I saw it and just had to get a better view!!! You are super welcome!! Keep up the fantastic work!!!
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:iconnicolemonique:
nicolemonique Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011
these collaborations are wonderful! i would like a whole book of them! :)
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011   Writer
thanks so much!
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:iconnicolemonique:
nicolemonique Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011
my pleasure, truly!
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:iconsakurakura:
Sakurakura Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is a very interesting piece, I really like the two together. Thank you for posting, and I like that you had linked this from another piece, other wise I would not have seen it.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011   Writer
much obliged
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:iconsarah-the-writer:
Sarah-the-writer Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2010
Whoa, so cool!! Great work!
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2010   Writer
thanks very much.
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:iconkneelingglory:
KneelingGlory Featured By Owner May 31, 2009
whimsical rhyming for the win :w00t:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner May 31, 2009   Writer
:)
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:iconschriftsteller:
schriftsteller Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2009   Writer
I keep stumbling across your poetry and I love everyone of them. I'd like them to be my lovers, keeping me warm in the dank rainy nights.

I suppose I'll just have to watch you.

This is amazing, as always. I think I find some melancholy in it, but that just may be my mood at the moment getting the best of me.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2009   Writer
thanks so much

and it certainly is
a bit melancholy
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:iconschriftsteller:
schriftsteller Featured By Owner May 4, 2009   Writer
You're quite welcome. :)
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:iconiamchlorine:
iamchlorine Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2009
And I thought I had problems.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2009   Writer
it's all a matter of perspective, I suppose ;)
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:iconhyetthramine:
Hyetthramine Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2009
I would be depressed too :cry:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2009   Writer
we'll get through this thing together.


xo!
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:iconbrytning:
brytning Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
The subtle rhyme here is very nice.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2009   Writer
:D thanks


xo!
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:iconpanda-vision:
Panda-Vision Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2009   Writer
"...laying my roots
sans stems
and shoots
a truth..."


That bit reads so well, which I guess is helped along by a sort of 'double-ended' alliteration/sibilance at both beginnings and ends of the words.

"...but though
I dream
of other worlds
than these
I
can not
change my skin..."


Certainly a bold and relevant enough statement to close on, for just about anyone I'm sure. Nice simple vocabullary, no bullshit, sums it up.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2009   Writer
much obliged, my friend


xo!
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:iconrebelegade:
Rebelegade Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2009
Aaah... The last stanza is purely amazing.
I also like the way that you separated your lines... Very unique!
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2009   Writer
thanks very much


xo!
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:icongiggidy-03:
Giggidy-03 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2009
Creativity is alive and kickin' my friend.
This and the Sedwick one are great reads.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2009   Writer
:D thank you, sir


xo!
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:iconout-of-spite:
Out-Of-Spite Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2009
lol that image is too cute! and the poem is priceless - it really makes me giggle! It'd be perfect in a child's book
:nod:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2009   Writer
thank you thank you


xo!
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:iconcrookd-bullet:
crookd-bullet Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
so adorable.
just lovely - the picture and the story! :aww:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2009   Writer
thanks a lot


xo!
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:iconthe-mighty-pillow:
the-mighty-pillow Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Theres something charming about it :)
I love the ending more every time i read it!

good work! :D
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2009   Writer
thanks very much


xo!
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:iconiampoetry:
iamPoetry Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Love the ending.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2009   Writer
:) thank you


xo!
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:iconmolchansky:
Molchansky Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2009  Professional Traditional Artist
it's really great, i wish my english was better so i could fully express my thoughts on this

loved it, and moved by it
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2009   Writer
thank you very much


xo!
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:iconmolchansky:
Molchansky Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2009  Professional Traditional Artist
:)
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:iconsulvee:
sulvee Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2009
that was fantastic
+so rare for me
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2009   Writer
:D thanks very very much


xo!
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:iconinfinite-ink:
Infinite-Ink Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2009
Loving both the picture and the poem. Well done, both of you. :star:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2009   Writer
thanks very much


xo!
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:icondavismarie:
DavisMarie Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
Wish I could :+fav: it again. ;)
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2009   Writer
haha. thanks :D


xo!
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2009
i detect a rhyme scheme! how you can do that...i don't know. it's not possible, yet you do it anyway. :clap:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2009   Writer
:D sometimes they sneak in
thank you


xo!
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:iconottersandsky:
ottersandsky Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2009
How did I miss this? I know lots of people enthuse about poetry on here, it can eventually get to a stage where it doesn't quite penetrate anymore -

but Shane, this made me smile and feel good after a crappy day, it's whimsical definitely and sweet, wistful, lovely.

You should write children's books.
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