^{wow those two sound beautiful together. sounds like a good relaxing song.}

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thanks, love

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Well done! Glad you joined the fun!

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Thank you.

thanks

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an antique arms and armor expert

This is lovely - I am glad you're in the chain!!

I do have a suggestion though, in terms of developing this as a haiku. Although I understand that it is linked to the last one, and it has a nice flow, I think you are right that it doesn't stand alone as a haiku, and that is because I think it needs another image to set off the one you have. What you have is EXCELLENT but it is really only the second half of a haiku - like so:

the tide pulls
me underneath

It needs another image. I am going to use a semi-cliche one to illustrate what I mean:

summer heat
the tide pulls
me underneath

So, yeah, I really think this needs another image to start it, in order to juxtapose something with the lovely image you have, thus transforming it from a sentence into a haiku proper.

But whatever you decide is fine, of course. On its own it still makes a nice link - but classically each link should still have its own internal juxtaposition, which sets off in juxtaposition to the other poem.



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initially it was just an offhand
response comment, but I posted it at
your urging. haha. I may add something to
it.

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added a little something.

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an antique arms and armor expert

I really like the direction you took this. Very well done!

Now we're cooking with gas!!!

Nice.



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thanks, scott

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