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eyes downcast
last words sealed with
closed mouth kiss

polite words
and broken
promises

this is the thanks I get
silence, scars
and cold regret
this gift's been given
for the last
time

endless longing
these open arms they
offer nothing

final grieving
for a
lost smile

a farewell just in case
your heart becomes misplaced
a fire burns
for such a short
time

I'll light a candle
in remembrance
I'll tie the knot
with a final kiss

a feeling like coming home
this sense of longing fits
like a glove

hold your breath
it fades away

these aching words
from bitter tongues
mean more to me
than you will
ever know

these last goodbyes
oh, so casual
each star in my sky
burns out when you
edit: you can now stream or download the song for free here: [link]

after posting that last song collaboration, I thought it might be fun to share an actual song I wrote, a few years ago, from the last "real" band I was in.

the song is called Last Goodbyes and I wrote it for a band I was in called What The Moon Brings. I named us after a short story by HP Lovecraft and wrote all the lyrics/did vocals.

this was the first song we ever wrote and it was recorded, with just a mike hanging over our heads, at practice one day. so, the quality is very rough.

also, if you don't like screaming - don't listen. if you don't like loud guitars, drum with double bass pedals being blasted, or experimental heavy indie rock/"post-hardcore" with keyboards - don't listen.

that being said, I think this band was quite good and, had we not broke up so soon, we would have gone places. the musicians I played with were amazing. drums & lead guitar, especially. I'm not usually one to toot my own horn but I was really proud to be in the band and still think very fondly of it.

so, if you like music like: The Blood Brothers, the pAper chAse, Dillenger Escape Plan, The Number 12 Looks Like You, Poison The Well, etc. - check it out! if you have an open mind - check it out! if you're just really curious - check it out!

I think the song really starts getting amazing around the 2:30 mark and I even wrote some of the music starting around the 3:00 mark. :)

enjoy!
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AngelusNoir Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2009   General Artist
oh...I think when you come to write your bio....everyone needs some obscure but rad band that broke up with one record?It's almost obligatory?!!:lmao:I find it amusing you've had to warn about the style,too?;p
my tastes run the gamut,so I would definitely have checked out a band with such a hip name;p...and I like your sound..Blood Brothers I agree...recalled for me...early Birthday Party,Einsturzende Neubauten....I don't listen to too much heavy stuff with my headphones,but would be great live:D
My only complaint would be...I would not be able to hear the lyrics sung like this...and it's a very good song:)
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2009   Writer
:heart:
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:icony0urstalker:
y0urstalker Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2009
Dude, this song is always just great
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009   Writer
:manhug: you're too kind, my friend
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:icony0urstalker:
y0urstalker Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2009
this comes up so many times in my random favorites that I can actually figure out where I am in the song now when I'm not actually reading the lyrics
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2009   Writer
you make me smile.
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:icony0urstalker:
y0urstalker Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2009
I keep thinking that's part of a song that I heard and liked but I can't quite place my finger on which one.
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:icony0urstalker:
y0urstalker Featured By Owner May 12, 2009
I had that "a farewell just in case
your heart becomes misplaced
a fire burns for such a short time" stuck in my head for half of today, really wish you had more of the music up from this era of your life
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner May 12, 2009   Writer
thank you, my friend.

I wish I had recorded some more
music during this time period.
sadly, this is the only song
from that band which remains.
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:icony0urstalker:
y0urstalker Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009
you know I come here a few times, to this poem, a few times.

I read it and I listen to it and I sing along but do not scream along to it, it's really beautiful and I always listen to it a few times more.

sometimes I listen to a game of stones too but that's only when I don't feel like listening to things that'll make me move, it's really only something you can enjoy relaxed so I can't really enjoy it most of the time.

anyhow I guess I'm trying to say that your music is great
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009   Writer
I am unable to adequately express
how much I appreciate your comment.
so, instead of my usual thanks, I
present to you this, never before
left by me on da, dancing milk carton,
as a token of my gratitude.

[link]


xo!
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:icony0urstalker:
y0urstalker Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2008
I think I first heard this when I saw it in your journal, then I wondered

"wtf is he saying?"

now I know, and the song is great, I wish the vocals were a little louder but yeah

the lyrics really helped me to appreciate the song.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2008   Writer
thanks very much. the level of the vocals/the
rest of the audio quality is lacking, I admit, but
I'm quite glad you like the song.


xo!
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:icony0urstalker:
y0urstalker Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2008
it wasn't just the vocals I liked.
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oldest-boy Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2008
impressive both wirtten and in music form.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2008   Writer
:D thanks a lot


xo!
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oldest-boy Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2008
you're welcome, my good man,

P.S

I Uploaded my first crack at prose.
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ottersandsky Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2008
a feeling like coming home
this sense of longing fits
like a glove
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2008   Writer
:heart:


xo!
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ShadowSteamWisp Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2008
i like "a feeling like coming home
this sense of longing fits
like a glove" best. i want to be in a band,but i cant sing,or play an instrument, though i can write good songs XD like yours,but certainly not as deep.or good.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2008   Writer
much obliged


xo!
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wellwornwings Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
*gasp*


excellent, my dear. wow.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2008   Writer
:hug:


xo!
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:iconrainydaydarling:
rainydaydarling Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
super cool.
I've always wanted to be in a band.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2008   Writer
thanks. start one.


xo!
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:iconrainydaydarling:
rainydaydarling Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
easier said then done?
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:iconpolish-princess:
Polish-Princess Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
beautiful :heart:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2008   Writer
thanks very much


xo!
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:iconjazzylemonade:
jazzylemonade Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2008  Professional Photographer
bravo!x
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2008   Writer
thanks very much


xo!
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jazzylemonade Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2008  Professional Photographer
:kiss:
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:iconicecreamuffin:
icecreamuffin Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2008  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i loved the song, it's a damn shame you guys broke up :(
i like the second to last stanza :clap:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2008   Writer
:heart: thank you


xo!
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:iconicecreamuffin:
icecreamuffin Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2008  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
you're welcome! :nod:
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RAWR-ima-Dinoroar Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2008
wow that song is fantastic, i just wish it was better quality =[
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2008   Writer
thanks a lot. :) I wish it was, too. haha.


xo!
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
I liked reading it more, honestly. My boat floats to different tunes.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2008   Writer
:) understandable. I just happen to listen to,
and enjoy playing, an extremely diverse selection
of music. from indie hip hop to jazz to rock to
country to punk to etc. etc.


xo!
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:iconiampoetry:
iamPoetry Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, that is diverse. I like stuff from Elvis to Lil' Wayne. Let me say it wasn't bad or the worst I've heard, needs something def. though.
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purplEPlastic Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2008
Hell Yes! :heart:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2008   Writer
:D


xo!
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purplEPlastic Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2008
:thumbsup: i can really get drunk on the feeling of your words. :heart:
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DemoinaReaper Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2008
"a farewell just in case
your heart becomes misplaced
a fire burns
for such a short
time"

its beautiful
haunting
and true


i love it
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2008   Writer
:heart: thanks very much.


xo!
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:icondemoinareaper:
DemoinaReaper Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2008
...meh i give up thank me if u want lol
your so talented...you should publish a book of your poetry
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2008   Writer
:hug:


xo!
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:icondemoinareaper:
DemoinaReaper Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2008
seriously!at least try get one published...what if i say please!!?
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2008   Writer
I just don't have the energy for all that.
however, I will have a poem in an online
magazine in december. :)


xo!
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:icondemoinareaper:
DemoinaReaper Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2008
close enuff..link it to me?
i got some of my art works used in university flyers...random
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2008   Writer
I'll most definitely put the link up,
as soon as it's published. :)


xo!
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