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Did you see the swirling notes?
Our alien Youth,
your alarming number of arms
and fissure fingers where a
heart should be.
For those paltry imitations,
psychologically deranged, haphazardly
drumming notes of a pale origin.
This reeks of perpetual almost,
an awkward inclination.
Huddled in a fatal fetal,
an exploding toccata of snowflakes,
resident(s) abandoned.

Did the temperature make changes?
Our angles crooked,
your deceitfully measured meters
and carefully petty lies
weaving a history.
In hope & hand, you placed
this paced anticipation.
Grown in gardens of twisted figures,
torturous notes, feel a resurrection.
Crumpled letters to the cracking crock pot,
this is the utmost
in unwanted ingredients.
Wrapped in failing feeling
and unavoidable collision,
presenting a past over future.

Did they feel this pull of gravity?
Our climbing solution,
your hours sing of emptiness,
collected resentments, and all
the waste of wanting.
Come for comfort and a comical tragedy,
pulling a penny from your eyes.
Rated a score in treble clef,
thoughts unreal; reverberating.
Made a promise
to a derailed conductor. Made tracks.
Forgetting a reality check green card
for a dream line subway,
word and world
withdrawn.
©2008-2009 *YouInventedMe
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Oh, the wordplay!
I am particularly fond of 'fissure fingers' and 'waste of wanting'.
thanks very much
:D


xo!

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2nd stanza is my fav....well done to you both...:clap:

and so i :) & :nod: & move on...

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A first sign of the beginning of understanding is the wish to die.
Franz Kafka
thank you, sir
sending your new album
shortly

xo!

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interested in collaborating?
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copy shall enjoy after work....
thanks man

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Franz Kafka
you make the gift of literature priceless
Keep up the sublime work man :)
very kind of you
thanks


xo!

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Yes!
Brilliance...
Fuckin A', my God.. This strikes the very core of that which is me, very well done.

:salute:

-The Doctor

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high praise, sir
my partner in crime & I
thank you heartily


xo!

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I am a poetry admin for *DailyLitDeviations.

interested in collaborating?
writer, photographer, painter, whatever(er) -
I'll mix with words with anything you've got.
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You thank or do you smoke, shove, chew up and ingest, or snort or drink to my health? lol ;) But, hey.. Always best wishes are good enough for me, usually better, but not always.. lol :)
Hey, don't mind me. I was dead for more than 11 minutes just a few weeks ago...
So, hey, you know..
'It's all just shapes to me.."

:salute:

-The Doctor

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