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I'mlosingmytouchtouchme by *YouInventedMe:iconYouInventedMe:



so I caved in
and you

you reemerged

resplendent in rubble

the always
perfect stranger
playing bait
but it's the silence
you're still
hooked on

last night
I dreamt a parasite
dissolved in salt water

today
I splayed myself on concrete
concerned 'bout explanations

these are the same shakes
these are the same shakes
you should be ashamed
snakes

I'm tired of shed skin
in lover's clothing
©2008-2009 *YouInventedMe
:iconyouinventedme:

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nothing if not worried

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:icondaneed6:
thats really creative ;)
awesome work :D
:iconyouinventedme:
:) thank you


xo!

--
an antique arms and armor expert
:iconcrabapplekid1:
In honest opinion, words cannot describe how much I love this.

Well I guess that worked pretty well.

Your way around words amazes me.

--
My choice early in life was either to be a piano-player in a whorehouse or a politician. And to tell the truth, there's hardly any difference.
:iconyouinventedme:
:blush: thanks


xo!

--
an antique arms and armor expert
:iconmissunderstand:
I like your ending as well.

--
----
I'm not going to ask you to,
but it would be nice,
if my gallery had visit from you.
:iconyouinventedme:
thanks


xo!

--
an antique arms and armor expert
:iconshackell:
I like this but it is jarring, especially with the "snakes". Still, nice turns of phrase here.

Would say more but am busy. Busy compounded by being busy kind of busy.

--
once you begin to do what is right, who will be able to do what is left?
Bertolt Brecht - "Because things are the way they are, things will not stay the way they are."
:iconyouinventedme:
thank ya much


xo!

--
an antique arms and armor expert
:icondutchshun:
Extremely well written and most creative too.
Superb flow of the pen. :clap:

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wishing well
coins desire
dreams ripple
:iconyouinventedme:
thanks very much


xo!

--
an antique arms and armor expert

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