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central park is aptly named
(and benches are made for sitting)

museums are mostly
memories
and man made men
out of stardust

iron atoms
forged in
some distant sun

furtively forming

full of the necessity
of death
and the glory
graciously provided
by the hereafter

and I
myself
am here after

vainly chasing history
frantic for membership

scribbling lines
in the space provided
making and marking time
taking ticks and tocks
in equal measure

dear new york,

you froze my broken heart

and I thank you for it
©2006-2009 *YouInventedMe
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~onlyadreamer Jan 7, 2006, 10:39:56 PM
that was wonderful.

--
I have all the answers, but I'm not telling.
~only a dreamer~
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~esther-astrid Jan 8, 2006, 4:29:59 AM
I think this is my favorite :-)
:iconyouinventedme:
*YouInventedMe Jan 8, 2006, 10:16:54 AM
glad you like it.

xo!
:iconfallenstar731:
~fallenstar731 Jan 8, 2006, 3:58:08 PM
Awesome! Rock on dude.
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~SpokenAubade Jan 9, 2006, 6:33:03 PM
It's written in such a simple way, yet the message is anything but. This is powerful, with its mournful and thoughtful tone and manner. I love the language and images and how the ending really shifted the meaning of the entire verse. I wasn't expecting the turnabout.

The words were balanced and the flow was easy.

A great write!


~Aubade
:iconyouinventedme:
*YouInventedMe Jan 9, 2006, 8:32:36 PM
wow, thanks a lot.
I would love for some feedback like this
on my other poems, even if you don't
find them as much to your liking.

xo!
:iconspokenaubade:
~SpokenAubade Jan 9, 2006, 9:33:22 PM
Thank you for adding me. I'll just watch you back and see what happens, commenting as we go along. :]
:iconyouinventedme:
*YouInventedMe Aug 25, 2008, 3:49:18 PM
thanks very much


xo!

--
an antique arms and armor expert
:iconcolonelfitz:
=ColonelFitz Sep 12, 2008, 2:05:17 PM
I like this. I haven't been to New York since I was really little and lived there, but it kind of makes me want to return, especially if it produces poetry like this. :)
This section is my favorite.
museums are mostly memories
and man made men out of stardust
iron atoms forged in some distant sun
I guess stardust is just useful like that. :)

--
I\\\'m like a noisy puppy :(

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Who breaks the thread, the one who pulls, the one who holds on? -James Richardson
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